Paper detalis:
Edit statement/ also there is a red mark on the upload.
Below I’ve provided an outline to help you with revisions for your body paragraphs as well as your thesis statement, so the two components tie together well.
First, revise your statement to be a “because” clause. Your statement should include not only your argument/position on your topic but also justify — the ‘because’ part – your argument with three supporting reasons.
For example:
Expanding a lottery system into Alabama will improve the quality of life in the State [stating my argument] because [signaling the justification] of increased funds for education, revenue to fund addiction services, and new job development [3 specific reasons].
Second, each well-developed body paragraph will address one reason each, using outside sources to support your reason.
